"They make you want to high-five them…in the face…with a brick." Wow girlfriend, don't be so cold! LOL - I found this to be an extremely valuable read, for any writer who is out there looking for places to write. I don't know what kind of results you're getting from this story, but it's definitely one people can use and will want to know about for sure, so I'm just going to mention this, and maybe it's just me and my fuzzy brain. If you don't feel like this story is performing well, I'd think about tweaking the title a little more. I stopped to read it because I was curious, but I didn't really know what to expect from the title or the subtitle (so I came to check because I'm nosey like that). Some readers might just pass if they don't have enough clarity, and trust me, the gold you're sharing is not something they would knowingly overlook. So if the title is working, cool, but if somethings not working right with this jewel, I'd start there. Thanks again :-)